The new idea

The reconsidered idea: The narrative

I carried out a quantitative audience survey to establish what they  would prefer to see in a thriller. Therefore, my group and I have based our ideas around what the audience would like to see. We have now come up with a new idea, which hopefully, when tested on our audience, they will approve. Here is the storyline my group and I have created:

The main antagonist will come out of the shower, put on his dressing gown, and put on his 

Here I am planning.

watch. He will then make his way over to a cupboard with a mirror in the bathroom. He'll look in the mirror and an over the shoulder shot will allow us to see his face. He puts on a watch and we hear the ticking, which at this point will be very loud. Inside the cupboard there will be rows of pills in bottles and needles. The character will then take one of the pill bottles, and put a pill onto his hand, shown through a close up shot.

He then takes the pill. The ticking sound will then become more muffled and it will represent the noises in his head, to which the medication has now tamed, and emphasises the focal point in the narrative of time.  He will proceed to get dressed into posh attire, such as a suit, and more unusual items of clothing, such as a ring. Then, he will walk into his bedroom where the whole of one wall will be covered in pictures of girls, newspaper clippings and articles about missing people. The rest of his room will be immaculate, almost as if the character has a form OCD, however this wall will contrast the room, as it will be disorganised and full with different artefacts. He will slowly walk alongside the wall, running his hand over the peoples faces. This will be slowed down in editing for effect. The audience will hear voices of news reporters talking about the cases of missing

Part of the unfinished story board and narrative.

girls, including their names, and this will cut to a flashback of a cross being drawn over that girls picture then return to him stroking the wall. The sound of these reports will be slightly muffled and sound out of tune at the end and also mimic strange voices in his head, making him appear disoriented and confused. Finally he will finish at the picture of a girl and smile (in a creepy way at it) and trace is finger across her cheek. Then, a noise will be heard outside, and so the character will cross the room to the window, look outside and the audience will  be presented with the girl in the picture shown on the wall, but she will be stood outside of his house. The camera will follow him through the house until he reaches the door and opens it for her. There will be a brief exchange of dialogue, then the opening sequence will finish.

I have started to complete a storyboard of the narrative to make the filming day run smoothly so that all the shots and locations are decided and thoroughly planned. I plan to finish the storyboard this week, as I didn't have enough time to complete this during my last lesson time.

The mind map of this idea: